Agreed. The first works better. The second gives too much of the ‘story’ away.Having said that, I find both too ‘narrow, or maybe it’s just the 4x5 (4x3) in me talking.
The first is appealing, for its zig-zag element. The second is too much going on, with zig-zag not that obvious and the addition of puffy clouds distracts from it further.