A fine capture.
Sometimes when I see a very dark interpretation I wonder if it's deliberate (which it certainly CAN be), or if there's something else at play. Certainly, working with a monitor that's set overly bright can cause one to process darkly. The histogram can give one a clue as to whether this might be the case. Below are the histograms of the original post and John's reworked image with the shadows lifted and the overall brightness adjusted a bit. On my monitor, the original looks too dark and a bit "muddy" as a result. John's interpretation retains the mood but elevates some interesting detail in the shadows and, overall, looks more pleasing. Although I work with a calibrated monitor and fairly consistent ambient lighting conditions, I still pay attention to the histogram as I process. Just a thought.