Richard, I like the general feel of the picture - but I also find the bottom a bit distracting. Because of the perspective the girl's forearm is a bit too dominant for me, and her hands are half cropped out - an awkward crop. If you left the hands in they would appear to big, and if you crop them out you will only get her from the chest up. So basically I feel the idea is good but you needed a bit more control at the taking stage - if that was possible.
Jim