Hi Todd.
I could go into a list of things to do to this image, but an example is so much more visually informative. It's just my opinion.
I saw a face that could elicit with, adjustments a more compelling narrative.
Peter
Peter, that's often how I do my pix too, and one reason that I currently spend a lot of time at wide apertures: it makes concentration on one thing more convincing. On a practical, non-aesthetic level, I started keeping well away from small apertures when I began playing with digital: bunnies! Also, why I find b/w more convenient, because then I am freed of worrying about how colour gets degraded when I push things into places they are usually not. Like daylight into darkness, for example.
Isn't digital photography wonderful?