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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: RSL on May 27, 2014, 11:22:23 am

Title: Passing Through (2)
Post by: RSL on May 27, 2014, 11:22:23 am
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Title: Re: Passing Through (2)
Post by: Harald L on May 27, 2014, 01:02:50 pm
Very strong. Evokes a most intense uneasiness: Who is the stranger?

Harald
Title: Re: Passing Through (2)
Post by: Jeremy Roussak on May 27, 2014, 02:35:07 pm
Quote from: Harlem22 on May 27, 2014, 01:02:50 pm
Very strong. Evokes a most intense uneasiness: Who is the stranger?

Yes, the sight of him would make me uneasy, too.

Jeremy
Title: Re: Passing Through (2)
Post by: David Eckels on May 27, 2014, 09:11:26 pm
Russ, may I ask why you chose to include the rather plain wall texture above his head? Also, why not a crop closer to or even cutting into a bit of the subject's left shoulder? I think it's is a fine, vaguely disturbing portrait.
Title: Re: Passing Through (2)
Post by: stamper on May 28, 2014, 04:08:27 am
Why would you want to cut a bit of the left shoulder? ???
Title: Re: Passing Through (2)
Post by: David Eckels on May 28, 2014, 08:34:29 am
Only for me, I find the junk on the right distracting and takes my eyes away from his face and his concentration on what he is doing with his hands. I would crop it just to the right of his elbow, between the L and the e of Russ' logo. Sorry for the crop talk, Russ.
Title: Re: Passing Through (2)
Post by: Eric Myrvaagnes on May 28, 2014, 10:35:31 am
No crop! No crop! No crop!!!
Title: Re: Passing Through (2)
Post by: RSL on May 28, 2014, 11:23:09 am
Good for you, Eric. But you know I wouldn't.

I don't know who he is, Harald. This is just one of the people who occasionally passes through my town.

David, I didn't choose the wall pattern behind him. He chose it by sitting that close to it. I don't find the wall distracting; in fact I find that it lends emphasis to the out-of-it nature of the guy and his junk. I'm not thrilled by the plastic trash at camera right, but I moved in close for the shot and it's just there. I suppose I could clone it out, but that would be difficult and I'm not sure it would add anything to the picture.

As far as uneasiness is concerned, the guy in Passing Through (1) makes me a lot more uneasy than this guy does.