Luminous Landscape Forum
The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: Jeremy Roussak on May 03, 2014, 04:05:34 pm
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Frayssinet. I wondered about cropping off the lower windows, so it more reflected its title. Or I could change the title.
Thoughts?
Jeremy
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I tried cropping on my screen, and I think it would be a bit stronger with a little taken off the bottom, probably to just below the upper cross-wise muntin bar on the window in the lower right. If you crop any more, you must leave some of that window (or clone it out), but there won't be enough to identify it as a window, so it will be a distraction.
I like the way the two roofs point toward each other.
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... Or I could change the title.
"Roofs, Windows & Roof Window" and no crop necessary ;)
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Wonderfully seen with great details, shapes, textures and tones.
Try simplifying the composition by cropping to near 4x5 and eliminating most of the bottom portion , putting the top right window in the bottom right. I think this would make for a stronger visual design with fewer distractions. The tiger drop also benefits from some slight distortion correction to partially correct the verticals. e.g. below with apologies if I have ruined your original intention. As an objective observer, this is what I saw in the image.
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It's an interesting picture of an old building, Jeremy, but one thing that bothers me is that the window panes on the right and in the roof look like recent replacements -- probably double-pane at that.