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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: seamus finn on December 27, 2013, 07:02:07 pm

Title: The Girls
Post by: seamus finn on December 27, 2013, 07:02:07 pm
A moment at a wedding ceremony:

Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: RSL on December 27, 2013, 07:07:55 pm
Seamus, I probably shouldn't ask this, but is the girl with the camera real? It's a cute bunch but. . .
Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: amolitor on December 27, 2013, 07:11:19 pm
I would title this one "the critic" myself.. nicely done, but the framing is, let us say, critical!
Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: seamus finn on December 27, 2013, 07:37:09 pm


OK, I come out with my hands up - a puzzling picture, but take a look at the guy in the background. He's an innocent participant in a scenario he doesn't know he's in. He's like everybody else in a street shot, except this is in a church. In the picture, you'd thing he's checking up the women, whereas in real life he's probably wondering how long more .... We've all been there.
 

I recently had my camera stolen/mislaid and my judgement has gone astray.  That's on top of some other stuff including bereavement things which I think on this site only RC truly understands. At this stage, I feel like saying 'So sorry for intruding, include me out.'


 
Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: WalterEG on December 27, 2013, 08:31:35 pm
My thought was that the guy might be a Nikonian being cynical that Canon is the tool of bridesmaids.

Sari-clad bridesmaids at that!


Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: Eric Myrvaagnes on December 28, 2013, 12:16:42 am
I would title this one "the critic" myself.. nicely done, but the framing is, let us say, critical!

I think Andrew said it best.
Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: Rob C on December 28, 2013, 03:52:17 am

OK, I come out with my hands up - a puzzling picture, but take a look at the guy in the background. He's an innocent participant in a scenario he doesn't know he's in. He's like everybody else in a street shot, except this is in a church. In the picture, you'd thing he's checking up the women, whereas in real life he's probably wondering how long more .... We've all been there.
 

I recently had my camera stolen/mislaid and my judgement has gone astray.  That's on top of some other stuff including bereavement things which I think on this site only RC truly understands. At this stage, I feel like saying 'So sorry for intruding, include me out.'




Quitting is too easy a path; it solves nothing, hurts even more people and one eventually realises that there are no solutions other than to make the best of what's left. And yes, massive, unbelievable disorientation in your life is one result - perhaps the single thing, grief apart, that most unsettles your mind and strengths. Personal judgements on courses of action seem to be primary failures, and I'd say God help anyone to whom it happens if it coincides with the male menopause which, of itself, leads to calamitous mistakes of personal navigation. To reduce the latter to a material perspective: were it not for the menopause I'd still have my old-but-perfect Hassleblads, perhaps even with a digital back...

Buena suerte, y animo!

Rob C
Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: Rocco Penny on December 28, 2013, 10:19:59 am
take heart! seamus,

your work is recommended by top artists,  it took me a few looks to see,
I wonder what those people you show here are thinking too.
well,
good day to you,
Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: louoates on December 28, 2013, 02:47:48 pm
This would mean more to me it were tightly cropped on just the bridesmaids. Then the camera would be the contrasting feature playing off the bouquets. To me it would then read that two of the girls are enjoying the wedding moment while the Canon girl was intent upon getting a creative photograph. If I wanted to include the man in the corner with mystery thoughts, I'd ditch the Canon logo that is way too much of a distraction.
Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: Eric Myrvaagnes on December 28, 2013, 03:49:13 pm
If I wanted to include the man in the corner with mystery thoughts, I'd ditch the Canon logo that is way too much of a distraction.
Or just add a cartoon "balloon" over his head to show he is thinking "Nikon!" :D
Title: Re: The Girls
Post by: davidh202 on December 28, 2013, 10:54:57 pm
Seamus,
I immediately caught what you were trying to convey in this shot and I luv it!
David