Luminous Landscape Forum
The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: mdg on June 20, 2013, 06:23:57 am
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Your thoughts again please?
Thank you (bow)
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The walkway leads to what?
Peter
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The walkway leads to what?
Peter
the altar
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the altar
Aha.
Seriously, I can't associate anything with the two objects, too. Perhaps you might consider a crop.
Harald
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Thought I saw a distant aircraft carrier.
;-)
Rob C
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Thanks guys
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One example when ambiguity (or rather sheer confusion) is not welcome.
Otherwise, without both unrecognizable elements, it would be a fine image.
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Absolutely. I remember when the winner of a local juried art show was three blank canvases. You might try something like that, Michael.
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Just to clarify, by the other unrecognizable element, I meant the thing at the end of the walkway, not the walkway itself.
On the other hand, if locals would recognize both without problems, then it would be a nice photograph for the local market as-is.
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I agree with the consensus. There needs to be something recognizable at the far end of the walkway to give the image some emotional resonance.
As it is you're just left scratching your head wondering what the heck is that thing is when it could have had real meaning.
The photograph seems like a near miss to me. There's a lot going for it, but where the composition takes the eye to doesn't make a whole lot of sense.
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FWIW, I agree with the others. This image left me wondering, "What IS that?" and not in a good way.
Mike.
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FWIW, I agree with the others. This image left me wondering, "What IS that?" and not in a good way.
Mike.
Same hereā¦ I would clone out the altar!
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On the other hand, if locals would recognize both without problems, then it would be a nice photograph for the local market as-is.
Yes, maybe you are right. This was taken in Bali, Indonesia near a Hindu Temple. The thing at the end of the walkway is I believe a small altar where they put their offerings to Hindu Gods. Attached is a closer look.
Thank you for the comments.
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Yes, maybe you are right. This was taken in Bali, Indonesia near a Hindu Temple. The thing at the end of the walkway is I believe a small altar where they put their offerings to Hindu Gods. Attached is a closer look.
Thank you for the comments.
From your initial image, I thought that your image was a composite. Now, put back in context, I see it a bit differently and need time to think about it.
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If nothing else it does make me want to get a closer look at the altar.
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This could be a perfectly fine picture if the altar were not visually divided by what looks like a moving flag or other piece of fabric.
To me this looks like one strange object (the bottom of the altar, it turns out) at the end of a pathway, and then quite some distance further away, a second mysterious object (the top of the altar, actually).
The fact that the horizon line cuts through the altar at about the point that the altar exhibits very light tones that blend with the water makes the splitting effect worse. Perhaps in color, or with a different conversion to b&w, or simply some burning and dodging you could "put the altar back together" which would help a great deal here, I think.
I don't mind not knowing what the object is at the end of the walkway. I *do* mind not being able to really even figure out where the objects are in space relative to one another.
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... To me this looks like one strange object (the bottom of the altar, it turns out) at the end of a pathway, and then quite some distance further away, a second mysterious object (the top of the altar, actually)...
Exactly how I saw it and why I found it confusing.
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Exactly how I saw it and why I found it confusing.
The very reason for my first comment.
Peter
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It looks like the top of the alter is the topmost object. Maybe with a sail or flags or something flapping in the wind.
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Yes, maybe you are right. This was taken in Bali, Indonesia near a Hindu Temple. The thing at the end of the walkway is I believe a small altar where they put their offerings to Hindu Gods. Attached is a closer look.
Thank you for the comments.
(frankly I liked the original-but I have no problem with the term altar as ephemeral and/or abstract) However if you have to crop it this is too much of a crop-maybe halfway in between but print it relatively large.
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Thank you so much for your comments