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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: Chris Calohan on June 09, 2013, 05:15:37 pm

Title: Mimosa
Post by: Chris Calohan on June 09, 2013, 05:15:37 pm

(http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8131/9000673748_86fe48b481_o.jpg)

Title: Re: Mimosa
Post by: David Eckels on June 10, 2013, 02:36:52 pm

I love the tones in this, but have to say the busy background is distracting and takes away from the Mimosa. The busyness made it hard to focus ::)

Title: Re: Mimosa
Post by: Jeremy Roussak on June 11, 2013, 03:38:30 am

Quote from: David Eckels on June 10, 2013, 02:36:52 pm

I love the tones in this, but have to say the busy background is distracting and takes away from the Mimosa. The busyness made it hard to focus ::)

Yes, sadly.

Jeremy

Title: Re: Mimosa
Post by: francois on June 11, 2013, 04:11:18 am

Same critic, background is a problem.

Title: Re: Mimosa
Post by: Chris Calohan on June 11, 2013, 07:26:56 am

This was the difficulty of the composition - lots of very-very green leaves against an intensely blue sky. Getting one range to work was easy. Getting a whole range of tones, not so easy so I changed the focus to a new set of tones trying to get both the red and yellow parts of the flower to pop out against the green. As soon as it stops raining, I'm going to go for a better angle.

(http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8546/8988865321_24860ca226_o.jpg)

Title: Re: Mimosa
Post by: Bruce Cox on June 11, 2013, 03:14:18 pm

or maybe something like this converted from your color version

Title: Re: Mimosa
Post by: Tonysx on June 11, 2013, 07:20:04 pm

Chris, I can understand your frustration at a) the messy background in the BW and with "light" decisions in the colour version. Maybe try to accentuate the positive?

Title: Re: Mimosa
Post by: Chris Calohan on June 11, 2013, 08:06:22 pm

I like what Bruce did with the B&W but I think the only hope for the color is a reshoot.

Title: Re: Mimosa
Post by: francois on June 12, 2013, 03:58:31 am

Quote from: Chris Calohan on June 11, 2013, 08:06:22 pm

I like what Bruce did with the B&W but I think the only hope for the color is a reshoot.

Bruce's version is indeed better but going back is probably the best way to go.