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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: David Eckels on January 06, 2018, 09:44:40 pm

Title: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: David Eckels on January 06, 2018, 09:44:40 pm

C&C welcome. Any title suggestions?

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: Alskoj on January 10, 2018, 07:57:37 pm

If it weren't for that "speaker" and the "vent" it would be a very beautiful image.

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: Eric Myrvaagnes on January 10, 2018, 11:21:47 pm

I think the "speaker" adds a bit of a nice chuckle, but I can certainly do without the "vent."

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: dlcox on January 11, 2018, 10:02:02 am

I like both the speaker and the vent.  However, the pattern of the roof is not easly intergrated.  I had thought to suggest much deeper shadows, but I doubt even that will tame it.

Bruce Cox
on DL's machine

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: brandtb on January 11, 2018, 11:28:35 am

Beautiful tone, color, and subjects. Much better without the vent/speaker. Btw, just name it very simply according to what or where it is - and leave the great image to "speak further" - an image like this doesn't need verbiage. /B

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: David Eckels on January 11, 2018, 03:40:37 pm

Thanks for the comments, all! But without the speaker and vent, it wouldn't be photography! ;)

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: David Eckels on January 11, 2018, 04:17:33 pm

OK, just because I considered removing the speaker and vent, too, I worked on this a few minutes ago. ;)
Honestly, not sure which I like better, the clean or the real one.
The proverbial horns of a dilemma :)

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: Peter McLennan on January 11, 2018, 06:22:33 pm

I vote clean.  Speaker and vent are distractions from the otherwise poetic vision.  Better story, better told.

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: Eric Myrvaagnes on January 11, 2018, 07:37:33 pm

David,

I suggest looking at the original on Mondays through Wednesdays and the "cleaned" version on Thursdays through Saturdays for a few weeks, giving both a rest on Sundays. See which one feels right/better/more interesting/etc. to you after that.

It's a nice image either way.

Eric

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: David Eckels on January 12, 2018, 10:58:39 am

Thanks Eric and Peter. Maybe I will title the clean one Bisbee MTW and the "dirty" one Bisbee TFS ;D

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: Peter McLennan on January 12, 2018, 11:42:50 am

Kudos on your excellent cloning skills, too. :)

Title: Re: Last one from Bisbee, maybe.
Post by: Kevin Gallagher on January 12, 2018, 12:45:36 pm

Quote from: Peter McLennan on January 12, 2018, 11:42:50 am

Kudos on your excellent cloning skills, too. :)

Absolutely!! And, for me, I like the one without :) !!

 David, thanks for posting such a thought provoking shot.

Kevin in CT