Luminous Landscape Forum
The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: Jeremy Roussak on May 13, 2017, 02:33:59 pm
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Comments?
Jeremy
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The top ~20% doesn't do much for me, but I quite like the rest.
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Great contrast of brilliant blue and subdued rock; dynamic, fluid wave and sedentary, solid rock, seemingly standing at attention against the onslaught of the sea.
The dynamic in the scene, though, is all in the lower left quadrat. I find my eye wandering out to the right or up to the top as there is nothing to "contain" my gaze or pull me back around to the left.
I also imagine there is more going on just out of the resume to the left.
I took the liberty of applying a simple crop hoping you might have another frame of similar composition.
If I was working in LR, I would have added a grad mask of -0.5 to -1 from the bottom right on an angle approximately parallel to the sloping top of the basalt.
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Again, Terry, you have seen exactly what I was trying to convey. There's not much going on to the left of the shot, in fact: there's a small bay and the waves don't break until rather further in.
I think removing some of the sky, as you and David suggest, is a Good Thing. I'll look at darkening the lower right: I liked the light, but maybe it's because that was the first sunshine we'd had in a good few days.
Jeremy
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I get what Terry is suggesting about the lower-right to mid-frame diagonal and I think it would be an aesthetic choice. I might apply some increased mid-tone contrast to the rocks, but his crop brings that wave and the rocks right into your face; that's a good thing in my book :) Beautiful, powerful wave, stunning rocks and a wonderful sense of anticipation, I think. Please share your final on this lovely and very interesting image.
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Well, gentlemen, after considering your advice this is what I've ended up with. It's a better shot. Thank you.
Jeremy