Luminous Landscape Forum
The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: Jeremy Roussak on July 12, 2009, 02:35:05 pm
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Or just silly?
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Jeremy
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No, not silly, I like the idea. Its about urban anonymity. For me its like a sketch wich could be refined with further tries.
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Nice idea, and good first try where I like the lineplay with the pavement and shadows. Maybe a few too many distractions around the border, but worth exploring further and see what you end up with.
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I agree with the above comment. The idea is good but there's too much going on in this shot. It would have a stronger impact without the distractions.
Anyway, this is a good start!
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Jeremy, I agree with the others. It's a good try. Paul Strand would like it. But there really are too many distractions in it. The light's great.
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You could try cropping off the left side, since there's nothing distinct there - the action and interest is on the right.
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Or just silly?
Not at all. I could see this working perfectly with just the one walker you have top right with the white shoes: the pavement (society, government, whatever authoritarian force you like) has laid out a strict path, veering to the bottom left, vs the individual whose shadow points bottom right (perpendicular to the pavement). Let's see a reshoot with just that. You've laid out a thought provoking concept.
John
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No, not silly at all. This could be a first class image if it were better composed, with less going on. I think just one set of legs and shadows would work better. Great light.
Ed
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Not at all. I could see this working perfectly with just the one walker you have top right with the white shoes: the pavement (society, government, whatever authoritarian force you like) has laid out a strict path, veering to the bottom left, vs the individual whose shadow points bottom right (perpendicular to the pavement). Let's see a reshoot with just that. You've laid out a thought provoking concept.
John
Thanks, all. Alas, it's in Sydney and I'm in England so a reshoot will be tricky. Maybe next year! I'll try cropping it a bit more tightly, though.
Jeremy
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Jeremy,
Here's one cropping that I like. The image is a winner, with lots of potential. Do try other croppings, and look for other similar scenes (even in England.)
[attachment=15373:footfall2.jpg]
Eric
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Thanks, all. Alas, it's in Sydney and I'm in England so a reshoot will be tricky. Maybe next year! I'll try cropping it a bit more tightly, though.
Jeremy
Im sure you could, with a bit searching, reshoot this pretty much anywhere
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Jeremy,
Here's one cropping that I like. The image is a winner, with lots of potential. Do try other croppings, and look for other similar scenes (even in England.)
[attachment=15373:footfall2.jpg]
Eric
I'm sure, as Christian observes, it could be re-shot almost anywhere (although sunshine is a rarity in Manchester!).
I see what you're aiming at, Eric, but your version looks a bit narrow to me. How about a compromise:
[attachment=15381:footfall_2.jpg]
Jeremy
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Yeah, super idea.....
....that I've been doing as a personal project for a couple of years now. <groan>
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I'm sure, as Christian observes, it could be re-shot almost anywhere (although sunshine is a rarity in Manchester!).
I see what you're aiming at, Eric, but your version looks a bit narrow to me. How about a compromise:
Jeremy
Jeremy,
Pegelli and Ed B mentioned it already, the main impact in this one comes IMHO from these very long shadows (and partly their pointing direction). Just wanted to re-emphasize, even if its obvious. (If someone feels different, please add your thought, thank you!)
Cheers,
Christian
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I'm sure, as Christian observes, it could be re-shot almost anywhere (although sunshine is a rarity in Manchester!).
I see what you're aiming at, Eric, but your version looks a bit narrow to me. How about a compromise:
[attachment=15381:footfall_2.jpg]
Jeremy
Looks good to me.
Eric