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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: Jeremy Roussak on July 16, 2015, 04:16:12 pm

Title: zig zag storm
Post by: Jeremy Roussak on July 16, 2015, 04:16:12 pm

Comments?

Jeremy

Title: Re: zig zag storm
Post by: Slobodan Blagojevic on July 16, 2015, 04:23:32 pm

Echoing of forms well seen. Perhaps more contrast?

Title: Re: zig zag storm
Post by: brandtb on July 16, 2015, 05:15:23 pm

Jeremy - too wan and not very interesting subject matter at this distance...the diagonals of land edge and sky just work your eye out of frame. The dark sky element is just another subject altogether that doesn't really support the landscape. It appears very noisy too in this jpeg? I think there are some very interesting aspects of the rock formations that work "better" when cropped - will message you some later when have chance. /B

Title: Re: zig zag storm
Post by: Bob_B on July 17, 2015, 09:55:36 am

I like the angles of the mountains and clouds, but also understand brandtb's concerns, esp. the 'crispiness' of the mountain side. I'm curious: what is that rectangular object in the lower left? Once I saw it, it acted like a magnet. I couldn't get my eyes off of it.

Title: Re: zig zag storm
Post by: Jeremy Roussak on July 19, 2015, 02:01:59 pm

Slobodan, I agree the ground could do with a bit more drama by way of contrast: I think the sky has enough already. Here's a version with a contrasty gradient mask applied to the lower half.

Bob, it's a road sign. It says END 241. Removing it would be trivial.

Jeremy

Title: Re: zig zag storm
Post by: francois on July 20, 2015, 04:53:35 am

I like the geometric patterns and the dramatic sky. I would also clone out the road sign.
Well done!

Title: Re: zig zag storm
Post by: PeterAit on July 20, 2015, 10:12:16 am

Quote from: Bob_B on July 17, 2015, 09:55:36 am

I like the angles of the mountains and clouds, but also understand brandtb's concerns, esp. the 'crispiness' of the mountain side. I'm curious: what is that rectangular object in the lower left? Once I saw it, it acted like a magnet. I couldn't get my eyes off of it.

That rectangular object is a highway sign, and I agree it should be "disappeared." I think this is a fascinating landscape but agree that it's a bit flat. I think some attention to processing could turn this into a very nice photo.

Title: Re: zig zag storm
Post by: sdwilsonsct on July 20, 2015, 10:24:41 am

I might increase contrast by darkening the distant mountain and brightening the closer, very slightly.

Title: Re: zig zag storm
Post by: MattBurt on July 21, 2015, 02:09:18 pm

Nice image, I really like the lines in the hillside. I agree about a little more contrast and cloning the sign but otherwise a nice image that I bet would look great as a print.