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Chris Calohan

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Maya's Bird
« on: November 13, 2014, 08:52:22 pm »

Caged Bird: Maya Angelou

A free bird leaps
 on the back of the wind
 and floats downstream
 till the current ends
 and dips his wing
 in the orange sun rays
 and dares to claim the sky.
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Colorado David

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Re: Maya's Bird
« Reply #1 on: November 13, 2014, 09:22:30 pm »

Nice capture.  Good wing position and sharp eye.  Since the bird appears to be climbing, I would prefer the space to be above and to the front rather than below and to the front.  Minor point.
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