I would suggest that such a gloomy interpretation would be much more suitable in b&w. In color, it looks simply muddy.
Actually the lower 2/3 of the image are already so low saturated its almost a black and white.
But I'd crop away 1/3 to 1/2 of the colored foliage in the top, just above the yellow bush to give it a more landscapish look and to reduce the colored background competing with the foreground. Would end up in a sorta 4x5"ish aspect ratio.
I believe there are numerous possibilities to work with this beautiful shot.
E.G. I'd try to use some negative clarity on the top part to give it a more dreamish, soft look and so on ... should be fun to try various interpretations.
And yes, I like the second version better.
Cheers
~Chris