It looks like a bit of a random grab shot to me, but even so I like it. I like the animated conversation taking place at the back of the Cafe between the two ladies and the day dreaming stare of the man in the window. Yes plenty to look at and plenty of interest and stories going on. I also like the B/W conversion, very pleasing, stylish and old-school.
If this was a random grab shot Andrew, then I think you should take more.
Not sure if I prefer Brian's lighter version to your orginal darker version, I think I would choose about halfway between the two, sort of not so light in the highlights and not so dark in the shadows.