I love long lens compression. However, I think you're into difficult country here. Generally, I get the feeling that these sorts of images work best in two distinct forms: from a high level looking straight across at other buildings on the same level or, alternatively, still with long optics but from (and including) the ground level, especially if you find it wet! You've chosen to be lowish, but cutting through cars/trucks is the same as cutting people mid-calf.
Have you other compositions from much the same position?