i like composition of the photo, however a little PP will make it more as I feel you saw it. IMO all digital photos need some PP.
All done in LR4.2 (the first image with 4.2) and the adjustment brush did most of the work for me. Happy to answer any question but please note rework edits are usually done in a minute or so on a laptop in a room with variable lighting and will not be perfect and must be seen and read as a editing/photography guide only.
All comments must be taken as just my personal thoughts and how I read the image. I was not there when the photo was taken and I can only guess the colours, conditions and the reason the photo was taken in the first place