Damon,
First: It's a very good street photograph. One of the best I've seen on LuLa in quite a while.
But:
#1: Never explain what you were trying to "convey." Always let the viewer come to his own conclusions. A good street photograph involves a story, but it doesn't need to make you understand the story. Ambiguity almost always adds to the picture's impact.
#2: You say that at the time you saw the scene you "made a snap judgment." I, and I suspect a few others on here would like to see the results of your snap judgment: in other words the un-cropped original. In street photography the best crop almost always is the original: the one you saw in the viewfinder when you tripped the shutter. To paraphrase Tuco in "The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly:" "When you have to shoot, shoot. Don't think." Good street photography always is a "snap judgment."