Well, as usual thank you all for your comments and opinions.
Putting aside the issue of whether the picture(s) are crap or not just for the moment, can I just say that if they
were in colour it would definitely
not improve them. There is only one colour in the frame, and that is green (not a terribly interesting green either), so they would effectively be monochromatic anyway. And as you know, I do not do colour photography (in fact, I am such an old curmudgeon that I do not regard colour photography as actually
being photography at all
).
I like the first picture, but, what if you separated a little more of what I see as three different areas:
1) Lighten the inner "V" created by the plants.(But keep the ground with the twigs as is.)
2) Leave the secondary "V" as is, and,
3) Slightly darken the outer area and "despeckle" the darker water?
William
Now, William, this comment is
extremely perceptive, because these steps detail pretty much exactly the editing strategy I adopted. The original file has in fact had all those things done to it. You might well say that I should have done them a little more aggressively, but I stopped at the margins of what I felt was the boundary of good taste. What is interesting here is that both you and I felt it was necessary to do all of this, and that perhaps is the key to the problem with this picture.
I think I basically agree with you all that the picture does not work very well. The reason for this is I think that I got caught up in the quality of the light (which was beautiful) and I was sloppy about framing the picture. Consequently, the composition is altogether too busy, there is no clear subject, and the eye is not drawn in or led through the frame in a satisfying fashion. The editing that I did and that William suggests was really just a forlorn attempt to salvage something from the wreckage.
So if I score this one against my own self-imposed criteria -
* Light - Brilliant
* Subject - Potentially interesting
* Composition - Pants
John