Guess I'm too much the commercial animal, then. I think it's damned nice just as it is. I don't subscribe to this thing about 'main subject' as being some kind of unwritten (though many do write it) rule to follow in all instances. What's wrong with just a nice combination of what's there in nature? You can crop in and out of a scene until the cows (frozen) come home, but you are still just editing, so I think this image is great in it's own right. I would have been very happy to have fathered it.
There's something here in this particular thread that takes me back to the 50s. I once joined a company camera club because I had no darkroom at home yet. The club held a competition and I submitted a still life shot of a mandolin, a Chianti bottle and something else I forget. I was told I was far too commercial. Though that intended put-down was delivered by the smuggest of 'seniors' I was very pleased and took it as an unintended compliment. Years later, I took my son on an 'open day' tour around that factory where I'd started as an apprentice when I was in that club; my turn to be smug: up on the wall in a department a copy of the Barbour Threads Auchindrain calendar, shots from which I posted here in LuLa some time ago. So much for the opinions of the senior, even if he turned out, in a way, to have been correct...
Stick with your instinct, Photobloke!