Bruce, I agree with Jennifer (michswiss). Technically it's quite a good picture, but as Jeremy said, there's too much going on and it makes it difficult to see what this picture is about. Since I'm not sure what you were trying to do, I'm not sure this is worthwhile advice, but if you were trying to do what I suspect you were you might want to get one of Lee Friedlander's books and run through his pictures of this kind of thing. They're all a lot simpler, which is one reason they're more effective, but there's something else there that I can't describe. You need to see it for yourself.