Riaan
Well, you have already told us what's wrong with it. On the plus side, focus is spot-on the right-hand animal, it is mostly sharp, and has excellent B/W tonality. But the composition is terrible - you have cropped it far too tightly, cut off the the left-hand subject, and left a hole in the middle of the picture with no subject at all. And no, you aren't going to save it by hoping a picture editor will pick it up for a full-bleed page in a magazine either. Most picture editors and mag designers have a pretty good eye for composition, too.
Nice elephants, though.
John