Topic: Four Palms, Wai'anae Coast (Read 2140 times)

jasonrandolph · « **on:** August 14, 2009, 11:43:29 am »

Another one from the not-so-calm before the storm this week. As always, critiques are appreciated.

JeffKohn · « **Reply #1 on:** August 14, 2009, 01:19:00 pm »

Very nice. I like that you get a sense of the wind blowing from the palm fronds, and that your composition has open space in the direction that the wind is blowing. The square format was a good choice for this image I think. The B/W conversion is nice, good separation of details but not overly contrasty, and the shadows aren't blocked up. If I were to nitpick, the back two trees are a little too close to the frame edge; a little more breathing room might have been nice (but not too much). The image is fine as-is on the web, but if you were to frame and mat it you might find that the mat overhang eliminates that little bit of breathing rom you have at the edge (and this image is worth of framing and matting). Also a step or two to the right could have eliminated the overlap between the front and back trees (assuming that it was possible to do so without something else creeping into the frame).

byork · « **Reply #2 on:** August 14, 2009, 07:32:35 pm »

Really like your composition here Jason...though Jeff makes a good point re the right edge.

Cheers
Brian

RSL · « **Reply #3 on:** August 17, 2009, 03:22:12 pm »

Jason,

I agree with Brian and Jeff. If you're going to frame it, it's too tight. Outside of that, the composition's excellent.

You sure are getting some mileage out of those palms. Must be great to have them practically in your front yard.

jasonrandolph · « **Reply #4 on:** August 17, 2009, 05:20:20 pm »

Thanks you all. That's good advice, and I'm working on a new crop, trying to maintain the square format, which I think works well here.

Russ: Yes, I certainly am getting some serious mileage out of the palms! I am using them partially as an exercise in composition, and partially as a project I'm working on. I'm not a fan of sunny skies when I have my camera in-hand, and the weather right now is a little too nice for my taste, so the convenience of the palms and nice sunsets attracts me on an almost weekly basis. But I DO need to get out there and shoot something new! :-)

cmi · « **Reply #5 on:** August 18, 2009, 05:03:02 am »

It has a good composition, and the mood is uncommon for me, when I see palms I somehow expect standart (color) pictures. But thats just me. I think its well done.

Christian

//edit: Actually, "well done" is too weak! I keep coming looking at it over time. Dark and fascinating.

button · « **Reply #6 on:** August 19, 2009, 11:28:36 am »

Just got to look at this one, Jason.

Well done. I like the force created by the two dominant line patterns:

The first set points from top right to bottom left and is implied by the direction of the blowing branches and is reinforced by the top of the background landmass, the foreground shoreline, and the lower clouds, bottom left. The second set of lines points from bottom right to top left and is created by the slightly darker, higher clouds, mid left. The level sea line tries to balance the two, but isn't enough (I mean this in a good way).

For me, these lines create a sense of chaos, as if two lanes of traffic are trying to cross one another, with no guidance. The chaos works in this impending storm setting- lots of motion, perhaps dangerous. Also, the backlighting of the trees makes their forms much stronger.

Nice!

John

jasonrandolph · « **Reply #7 on:** August 19, 2009, 05:05:35 pm »

Thanks Christian and John. I appreciate the comments. I haven't had a chance to post the new crop with a little more room on the right, but I'll try to get to it tonight.

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