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« on: April 14, 2009, 12:40:38 AM »

Here's the first in a series.  C&C appreciated.

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« Reply #1 on: April 14, 2009, 01:25:36 PM »

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Here's the first in a series.  C&C appreciated.
I love most of the colours, but the reds and oranges seem a bit over the top and artificial, particularly along the edges of the upper leafs.

I'd wish for a bit more air to the right of the leaves, and I'd consider cropping the bottom 10% off.

Apart from that, the blur works quite well, at least at the chosen display size.
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« Reply #2 on: April 14, 2009, 05:43:37 PM »

I guess only you would know if the reds were really that red. I have seen extreme reds particularly when backlit or flora that turn colour prematurely. But my critique is that the background is not sufficiently OOF (out of focus) to be unobtrusive. If you look at the OOF branch extending from the upper left third area, it runs like a line leading the eye out of the main area and through the photo. The same holds for the bottom area where there are two dark areas that should perhaps be cropped. This is quite common in photos of this type. Hard to avoid. I don't find the red colours that extreme and I do like the main subject and premise of the image.
 
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« Reply #3 on: April 14, 2009, 07:59:55 PM »

An edited version:
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« Reply #4 on: April 14, 2009, 08:00:47 PM »

The next in the series:
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« Reply #5 on: April 14, 2009, 09:17:17 PM »

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An edited version:
I like the edited version of first image quite a bit.  It just comes to life and the luminesence helps to overwhelm the white areas.

Re the second image, it is quite nice. Sort of has an abstract quality with its colour combination and the unusual perspective.

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« Reply #6 on: April 14, 2009, 10:23:28 PM »

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I like the edited version of first image quite a bit.  It just comes to life and the luminesence helps to overwhelm the white areas.
Re the second image, it is quite nice. Sort of has an abstract quality with its colour combination and the unusual perspective.
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The edited version shows off the leaf better, but now the out of focus background just extends too far down from the leaf.  I'm guessing some of that area could be cropped out.
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« Reply #7 on: April 19, 2009, 11:47:53 AM »

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The edited version shows off the leaf better, but now the out of focus background just extends too far down from the leaf.  I'm guessing some of that area could be cropped out.
Uhm? It was already cropped out a bit, the OOF background is smaller in the second version.

To my eye, the balance works quite well, but I acknowledge that this is also a matter of taste.
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« Reply #8 on: May 07, 2009, 11:49:07 PM »

The next in the series:

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« Reply #9 on: May 08, 2009, 08:10:42 PM »

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Very nice golden glow to that leaf, and the brown color it fades back to is an excellent complement.
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« Reply #10 on: May 11, 2009, 07:13:24 PM »

I like all of them. They're very striking. Good work.
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« Reply #11 on: May 12, 2009, 12:45:05 PM »

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I like all of them. They're very striking. Good work.

Thanks, man- you're a pretty tough critic, so I very much appreciate that!  More to come.

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« Reply #12 on: May 12, 2009, 02:42:37 PM »

The next one...
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« Reply #13 on: May 12, 2009, 06:18:01 PM »

I really like flowering dogwood.  The lighting here is great, but a little greater DOF would be nice.

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« Reply #14 on: May 12, 2009, 08:31:28 PM »

The out of focus flower in the top half dominates the image. I would do something, crop it down a ways perhaps.
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« Reply #15 on: May 13, 2009, 03:51:37 PM »

I'd suggest a re-shoot.
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