To me, the photo is more about planes and shape and volume.
Thanks! Yes, definitely, there's a bit too much sky in my (uncropped) version.
Even if I like your desaturated version much, I'm a bit more reluctant to do so because I really see in colors, and I'm not able to visualize anything in B&W at all (lucky for me to live in the digital photography era).
V0.3 with also a quick'n'dirty dodging to guide the eye a bit more...