minimalism 2

[Jeremy Roussak]

Heartened by the response to my first effort, I though I'd try again. Comments?

Jeremy

[RSL]

More good stuff. Good shooting, Jeremy. Careful. Don't fall in.

[GrahamBy]

I like this one better, for whatever that personal response is worth... Possibly because tt conjures up associations with Buddhist caligraphy.

[Rob C]

When I was about sixteen, I discoverd that I could do that in the snow quite easily, and it would usually turn a yellowish-green. Of course, it was a high-risk trick in the circumstances. (No near pun intended.)

I might have discovered this at an earlier age, but as I saw no snow between the ages of eight and sixteen, I can't honestly say.

;-)

Rob

[Eric Myrvaagnes]

I like this one, too, Jeremy. You're onto a good thing, methinks.

[Tony Jay]

Jeremy - I had a look at both images that you posted.

You are definitely onto something here.
These images definitely show that less can be more!

Perhaps my only nit - and I readily acknowledge that this is a matter of personal preference - is that I would like to see a bit more detail in the snow.

I could imagine a large print of either image in a boardroom or corporate foyer somewhere causing a bit of a stir!
Congratulations!

Tony Jay

[francois]

Keep them coming, I like the concept. FWIW, I slightly prefer this one over minimalism 1.
Good job!

[John R]

I like this one too, Jeremy. It is striking. But it is not as clean an abstract as the first image. On the mid right side is a subtle shady line that draws your eye away and to the border. At the top are more subtle shady areas that are very strong and draw your eye precisely because everything else is white. Since you have a square format, I think a better balance for placing the snake curve would be between the the top two shady areas. The top right shaded area, in particular draws my eyes away from the direction of snake curve. But I am sure that since I was not there, you have reasons for choosing that composition.

JR

[Jeremy Roussak]

When I was about sixteen, I discoverd that I could do that in the snow quite easily, and it would usually turn a yellowish-green. Of course, it was a high-risk trick in the circumstances. (No near pun intended.)

If you could have created something of that size, Rob, I'd have been seriously impressed!

Tony, John R: fair points. I don't want too much detail in the snow (it's supposed to be minimalist, after all) but I suspect there's some there that could be brought out: it might have been lost in the conversion to jpeg for posting.

Graham, I see what you mean.

Jeremy

[Rob C]

If you could have created something of that size, Rob, I'd have been seriously impressed!

Tony, John R: fair points. I don't want too much detail in the snow (it's supposed to be minimalist, after all) but I suspect there's some there that could be brought out: it might have been lost in the conversion to jpeg for posting.

Graham, I see what you mean.

Jeremy

I'm due a flowmeter test sometime soon - I hope I can replicate, if even for a brief, but torrentially complete, time! Amazing what a litre of water can produce if you have to wait long enough to prove your point.

Rob

[Jeremy Roussak]

How about this, then? I've added a little detail in the snow generally but removed some of the stuff that Graham found distracting. It doesn't lend itself to re-composing: there were other distractions around.

Jeremy

[GrahamBy]

removed some of the stuff that Graham found distracting.

Did I ? I hadn't realised, but maybe they did, I like this better 

[graeme]

How about this, then? I've added a little detail in the snow generally but removed some of the stuff that Graham found distracting. It doesn't lend itself to re-composing: there were other distractions around.

Jeremy

Interesting, I like it.

You seem to make your best photos in freezing conditions.

[Jeremy Roussak]

Did I ? I hadn't realised, but maybe they did, I like this better 

Whoops. I meant John R. I shouldn't compose messages while trying to catch up with the plot of The Archers.

Jeremy

[Jeremy Roussak]

Interesting, I like it.

You seem to make your best photos in freezing conditions.

Thanks. There's nothing quite like not being able to feel your fingers to concentrate the mind, I think.

Jeremy

[John R]

If you like the image, I hope you are not altering it on my account. I am just trying to give a critique.

I see this primarily as an abstract, so the detail in the snow is secondary. But it is good that you removed the distracting middle gray detail in the right middle section. The shape and tone of the line (creek) is primary along with the stark white space around the line. Usually an S or winding curve is dynamic and conveys motion. For some reason your placement of the curve in the picture space strikes me as static. It does not appear to lead the eye anywhere or throughout the image. I think it has to do with the amount of space above and below the curve. I really don't want to alter your image too much, but would you consider a rectangle format? That would reduce the space I mentioned above.

JR