A sweeping attempt

[drmike]

This doesn't really work but I tried. Why doesn't it work?



It sort of nearly does as I have good colours, a variety of curves, a sort of horizon that's sort of level but it does have those hard stripes top left. Taken with a 12mm on APS.

Mike

[Tony Jay]

Mike, why would you say this image does not work?
I can only surmise that you had some predetermined idea of what you were looking for and this image doesn't completely measure up.
However it is a fine abstraction with a lot of admirable qualities.

I would be very interested in your assessment of why this image fails.

Tony Jay

[EricV]

I think it works nicely as an abstract.  Perhaps you were looking for a little more motion blur?  You could try applying some blur in post-processing, see if you like the effect better.  Show us the result if you give this a try.

[Eric Myrvaagnes]

I find it quite pleasing.

I would try EricV's suggestion and see whether that softens those "hard stripes" enough.

Tony Jay's comment is also quite appropriate.

[Arlen]

If you hadn't clued us in that it "didn't work", I would never have guessed it. It looks great to me.

[drmike]

Thanks guys. I'm no great fan of PP blur, it never seems to look right when I do it although I'm sure I have admired many shots where it's been used and I simply don't realise!

As to why I'm unhappy? It just doesn't look right to me but I find it hard to say why. I'm still hoping someone comes along and can identify what's wrong!

Mike

[Bob_B]

As to why I'm unhappy? It just doesn't look right to me but I find it hard to say why. I'm still hoping someone comes along and can identify what's wrong!

Mike

I like your photo, and would not have thought twice save for your comments. I can only guess what was in your mind's eye when you captured the image with your camera, but I wonder if maybe you want less sharpness in the bands; something a bit more out of focus perhaps? Do you think that's what doesn't look right?

[drmike]

You might right. It was shot with a 12mm lens at f22 so everything would most likely be sharp and that might be part of it.

[degrub]

the circular pattern makes me dizzy like i was on a merry-go-round.
Maybe a more narrow field of view (limit the vertical) ?
Frank

[luxborealis]

If you hadn't clued us in that it "didn't work", I would never have guessed it. It looks great to me.

+1

It's playful; as Frank says, a merry-go-round.

If you want, try dropping your black point then reducing contrast a bit and adding a touch of saturation to increase the whimsicalness.

[Mjollnir]

Nicely done, in fact.

It's refreshing not to see the same old shot of trees done with this technique.

[drmike]

Very hard to do those trees though. I tried it with bluebells and it wasn't at well received