Late to the party, Matt.
Both photos are, to me, equally evocative, but in different ways.
I'm wondering if more could be made of the midtones in the first. The grasses seem to blend together in a dull, kind of lifeless way, when (knowing how grasses look in B&W from the Serengeti to the Prairies), with more local contrast, you could inject a little more life into them. Adding a little LR Clarity either globally or, better yet, as an adjustment brush with, perhaps an increase in contrast, would do it. But don't overdo it as it would then detract from the rest of the photograph.