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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: Roberto Frieri on July 03, 2013, 10:44:37 am

Title: Dawn on the lake
Post by: Roberto Frieri on July 03, 2013, 10:44:37 am
Hi to you all.
A picture for your review.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: Slobodan Blagojevic on July 03, 2013, 10:58:29 am
Roberto, nice atmosphere.

I find the amount of bright sky rather excessive, however, attracting too much attention and leading the eye out of the picture too soon. I would crop it out, leaving just a sliver of it, enough to mirror the bright string of fog at the bottom.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: RSL on July 03, 2013, 11:16:39 am
+1 (Arrrggghhh!!!)
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: AFairley on July 03, 2013, 11:34:25 am
Nice!  I'm OK with the sky as is.  I'd probably lighten the building just a tad, I think it's an important element and it tends to disappear a bit.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: nemo295 on July 03, 2013, 11:39:48 am
Unfortunately, I think the sky really needs to go.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: RSL on July 03, 2013, 11:53:01 am
And a bit of a gradient to lower the tone on the hills. . . This is a crude suggestion. With the original raw file you could do a lot better than I was able to do with the jpeg.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: Rob C on July 03, 2013, 12:56:48 pm
Nope, I'd keep the original sky mass but vignette it a little bit and try not to lose the ray of light (accentuate it even), coming over the dip in the crest of the hill and going towards the right of the shot.

Rob C
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: 32BT on July 03, 2013, 01:01:33 pm
Nope, I'd keep the original sky mass but vignette it a little bit and try not to lose the ray of light (accentuate it even), coming over the dip in the crest of the hill and going towards the right of the shot.

+1

Either leave enough breathing room above the mountain tops, or crop them off entirely. (There is a lovely subtle drawing in the background in the latter case).
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: Bruce Cox on July 03, 2013, 07:14:23 pm
Maybe some verticals would help.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: Slobodan Blagojevic on July 03, 2013, 08:04:34 pm
Maybe some verticals would help.

That's a totally novel approach... not without a merit, though.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: brandtb on July 03, 2013, 08:37:29 pm
I would ask yourself what are the subjects. If one is mood, and I would say it is...is it enough to carry the mid-ground, and the buildings in mid-ground and the their landscape, and the lower portion of the mtns....the buildings are not that interesting to me, and have no interesting light, or perhaps enough of/ or right light on them. The middle ground seems to me the "black hole" in this image if you will...and you may not be able to get around it. If you shot color and converted...do you have some lens cast color issues where it's blown out upper left?
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: wolfnowl on July 04, 2013, 01:08:14 am
Nope, I'd keep the original sky mass but vignette it a little bit and try not to lose the ray of light (accentuate it even), coming over the dip in the crest of the hill and going towards the right of the shot.

Rob C

I'm with Rob here.  I agree with Slobodan that the top left is too bright, but chopping it off changes the whole balance of the composition, and not in a good way.

Mike.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: francois on July 04, 2013, 06:31:38 am
I'm late but after much thinking, I prefer the original one but bother versions are outstanding.
Title: Re: Dawn on the lake
Post by: Roberto Frieri on July 04, 2013, 09:44:11 am
Wow, so many comments and useful suggestions... That's fantastic!
Thank you all.