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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: amolitor on May 08, 2013, 11:23:57 am

Title: Buttercup
Post by: amolitor on May 08, 2013, 11:23:57 am: .
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: petermfiore on May 08, 2013, 12:33:13 pm: I feel this screams for color.

Peter
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: wolfnowl on May 08, 2013, 02:31:44 pm: I agree. There's not enough in the composition to make it interesting.

Mike.
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: Jeremy Roussak on May 08, 2013, 05:07:53 pm: Quote from: petermfiore on May 08, 2013, 12:33:13 pm
I feel this screams for color.

Peter

Keen as I generally am on b&w, I agree. The flower doesn't stand out without it.

Jeremy
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: RSL on May 08, 2013, 05:31:20 pm: Quote from: petermfiore on May 08, 2013, 12:33:13 pm
I feel this screams for color.

Peter

Yes!
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: amolitor on May 08, 2013, 05:42:04 pm: I have to say, it is completely hideous in color. The wood is orange, the flower is yellow. It's just ghastly. If the wood was silver, it would probably be quite nice. But, it's not.

Thanks for the comments and I don't mean to shut them down with this remark, just putting it out there that no color version will be forthcoming ;)
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: Eric Myrvaagnes on May 08, 2013, 06:34:26 pm: Then I would try darkening the orange wood and lightening the yellow flower so that they separate more.
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: Tony Jay on May 08, 2013, 06:47:24 pm: Andrew I think the consensus is right.
Maybe some post-processing creativity is in order here.

Tony Jay
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: amolitor on May 08, 2013, 07:15:40 pm: I never disagree with the consensus. By posting something for critique I am specifically asking for exactly that!

It's clear that there's not enough separation between the flower and the wood, I'm either going to see if I can do something about that, or dump it. Color doesn't work for me here, but there are some other things I can try.

Again, thanks everyone. Valuable input, as always. You guys are 100% reliable.
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: Bruce Cox on May 09, 2013, 01:00:29 pm: Quote from: amolitor on May 08, 2013, 07:15:40 pm
I never disagree with the consensus. By posting something for critique I am specifically asking for exactly that!

It's clear that there's not enough separation between the flower and the wood, I'm either going to see if I can do something about that, or dump it. Color doesn't work for me here, but there are some other things I can try.

Again, thanks everyone. Valuable input, as always. You guys are 100% reliable.

I'm not 100% reliable, nor part of this consensus. I'm not worried about the flower; you have shown it well and it can take care of itself. The carved wood is the main figure. The black shadows are the ground. You might try blackening the triangle in the bottom lift corner.
Title: Re: Buttercup
Post by: amolitor on May 09, 2013, 02:23:14 pm: What an interesting idea. The black triangle UPPER left has been bothering me, but I need it for the black area lower right. Blacking the lower left feels like just the right thing to fill it in.

I have a version now with the flower dodged up and the wood pushed pushed down. If you looked at one version today and the other tomorrow you might not be able to tell them apart, but side by side it's obvious. I think the overall picture is improved.