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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: haring on June 14, 2012, 08:35:18 am

Title: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: haring on June 14, 2012, 08:35:18 am
(https://sphotos.xx.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ash3/530493_10150636181336577_231243854_n.jpg)
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: Slobodan Blagojevic on June 14, 2012, 08:44:18 am
Looks good to me, as-is.
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: amolitor on June 14, 2012, 09:27:21 am
I'm mostly with Slobodan here. Perhaps move them slightly more into the light so their feet are distinctly separated from the gloom? It would be different, but I hesitate to say better.

The only thing I actually have trouble with is that the light source is very vague, or at any rate *I* can't tell where it is. This looks like a simulated street-lamp-in-the-snow image, and I do not know offhand how the light in a real one differs, but I feel like it does.
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: popnfresh on June 14, 2012, 09:46:41 am
I don't have a problem with it. Maybe the couple could be slightly larger within the frame, and less remote. But that's just a quibble.
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: Tony Jay on June 14, 2012, 09:47:02 am
Hmmm...this is actually a very cool image.

I wouldn't criticize it.
Agree that the light source is not clear but the mystery of the light could be a parallel with the mystery of love.
The falling rain seems to hold a promise of prosperity and fertility.
The umbrella could be a representation of the shelter and succour that true love should offer.
Overall, the contrast between the light and the darkness is the attraction and promise of love.
What's not to like!

Regards

Tony Jay
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: RSL on June 14, 2012, 11:11:25 am
Love it. I hear what Pop's saying, but I don't agree. As Tony implies, it's a picture of their engagement bringing them out of darkness into the light, so there needs to be plenty of darkness to be brought out of. And we know they'll live happily ever after...   ;D

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Post by: Justan on June 14, 2012, 11:19:39 am
Gorgeous work!
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: Eric Myrvaagnes on June 14, 2012, 12:59:18 pm
Love it. I hear what Pop's saying, but I don't agree. As Tony implies, it's a picture of their engagement bringing them out of darkness into the light, so there needs to be plenty of darkness to be brought out of. And we know they'll live happily ever after...   ;D


+!.
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: ckimmerle on June 14, 2012, 01:00:07 pm
I like the image, but am not in love with it. For me, the black is too overpowering in its uniformity. I keep wanting to see some little bit of detail with it to make me believe that the couple is part of a larger context rather than alone in a black abyss.

Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: MartinSpence on June 15, 2012, 07:06:10 am
I like this idea - tho I think I'd have made the transition from the brightness to the darkness less harsh.. It just seems to change suddenly.
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: haring on October 09, 2012, 11:32:57 pm
I like this idea - tho I think I'd have made the transition from the brightness to the darkness less harsh.. It just seems to change suddenly.

I see! I got your point! Thanks!
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: haring on October 09, 2012, 11:33:57 pm
Thanks for all the input!
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: Rob C on October 10, 2012, 03:39:09 am
The only failure in an otherwise beautiful piece of photography and thought is this: you might have given the guy a three-inch block upon which to stand, and then shadowed it out...

This works: there's a celebrity couple that does a lunchtime cooking slot on Spanish tv that I see every day having lunch (I'm having lunch, they are up on the screen) in the local restaurant (her name's Mariló Montero and she has the most appealing dark, Spanish glamour - sophisticated not cute; her partner's name I have no idea) and on tv, as they move around the studio with the other two characters, she's taller than he. However, they always push their cookery book on the show, and on its cover, he's suitably taller than she... looks far more appealing than the reality of the small man with the big girl. The point, as I see it, is that a still image sticks in the mind longer than for just the time you look at it, whereas the moving one is far more transitory and is easily forgotten.

I have no problem with short men and tall ladies; in life that's an entirely private affair that may offer its own complications, but these are far removed from the circumstances of this little discourse. I feel no sympathy for people taking on more than they can chew, and in reverse, I sense a sense of dominance at play, a rôle-swapping that might well offer its own intrinsic reward but, as I indicate, I'm no judge of that at all and believe in private freedoms, regardless of state in which they might happen to be being played out.

I guess Tommy Cruise spoke out on behalf of all short men. In all states.


;-)

Rob C
Title: Re: Engagement Photo - How to improve?
Post by: Emilmedia on October 10, 2012, 04:13:23 am
Great image and idea,

as someone said earlier, i wouldnt make the black all black, that kind of makes the composition wierd. The picture would imo look even better in if we got to see the  location. Also the skin is very yellow/red. Maybe its cause of the umerella. All-in-all good picture tho!