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The Art of Photography => User Critiques => Topic started by: Patricia Sheley on February 15, 2011, 06:37:13 pm

Title: Standing Room Only
Post by: Patricia Sheley on February 15, 2011, 06:37:13 pm

Thanks for looking over my shoulder, and comments as I start to work this group...your thoughts always appreciated...

Title: Re: Standing Room Only
Post by: RSL on February 15, 2011, 07:19:27 pm

Patricia, I just finished a rant about the general fatuity of photographic abstractions for Rob on a different thread, but this abstraction is close enough to concrete that one can't miss identifying it after a moment's inspection. If it were me, and, perhaps, only if it were me, I'd back off and open up the scene a bit. It's a very fine photograph of a piece of reality without being an abstraction.

Title: Re: Standing Room Only
Post by: Patricia Sheley on February 15, 2011, 08:46:02 pm

Russ...See, that is why it is not safe to let me loose ...as this little prep file demonstrates....not moving out....moving in...have an idea working...


Can't find your abstract post to Rob...

Title: Re: Standing Room Only
Post by: RSL on February 16, 2011, 07:04:54 am

http://www.luminous-landscape.com/forum/index.php?topic=51405.msg423364#new

Title: Re: Standing Room Only
Post by: Rob C on February 16, 2011, 12:18:34 pm

My first impression was the couch beside the pool in James Mason's Beverly Hills pad in 1979. I thought it to be the old thing without its outer fabric - just the rotted foam. Then, the penny dropped to the bottom of the box and I realised it was more snow. Cool, in both senses.

Rob C

Title: Re: Standing Room Only
Post by: wolfnowl on February 16, 2011, 12:21:49 pm

I agree with Russ - fine shot (the first one), but taking a step back would have been better.

Mike.

Title: Re: Standing Room Only
Post by: Jeremy Roussak on February 16, 2011, 12:41:46 pm

Quote from: Patricia Sheley on February 15, 2011, 08:46:02 pm

Russ...See, that is why it is not safe to let me loose ...as this little prep file demonstrates....not moving out....moving in...have an idea working...

I prefer this one as a concept but the wonderful glistening of the snow, which is very much a feature of your first, is lacking. I think it would be better in b&w, too: colour adds nothing to it.

Jeremy

Title: Re: Standing Room Only
Post by: donaldt on February 18, 2011, 11:31:55 pm

the composition seems valid
instead of taking a step back
I think what would make the difference is a wider lens here

Title: Re: Standing Room Only
Post by: William Birmingham on February 22, 2011, 12:11:15 pm

Hi there,

As with others I find the idea a good one but would like to see a bit more of the scene.
Other than that, too much deep shadows ruins it for me.

I love the title you used - that is what brought this moth to the flame.

Greetings.
-- Will Silent